delete both stories and rewrite them properly. these two chapters are nothing more than a story OUTLINE it is not a POSTABLE STORY. Tamil sex 18 comments«1234»Anonymous readerReport 2016-03-21 14:09:50It was a good start but you really need to finish the story before you submit it.Anonymous readerReport 2013-12-26 18:50:27another crappy chapter that FAILS to give proper background or character development. delete both stories and rewrite them properly. this needs major rewriting by a GOOD WRITER that knows enough to PROOFREAD and use a GOOD EDITOR before posting. they could both be posted as one chapter and need to be two or three times longer.anonymous readerReport 2013-01-10 01:11:12Is their going to be a part three«1234»




















